Did I do all my homework thats due for tomorrow? Math? English? Science? Social Studies? Okay Im good! I cannot believe Jessica lied about who she was hanging out with this weekend. I guess she really didn't want me to know! I had fun with my best friends Simone, Caroline, and Charlotte . I wonder does Jason like me? People said he does but I JUST DON'T KNOWW. Its killing me.
I am exhausted I should go to sleep. I am so uncomfortable. I am starving I should have eaten dinner. I wonder if I cut my hair would I look the same or completely different. It was really hot today. I just sat in the house and watched Teen Wolf all day!
Hi Bria!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your first paragraph. It really sounded like someone's thoughts! I like Teen Wolf too. It is so good! What other characteristics makes your character unique?
Best Wishes, Katherine Ann.
Your character has a strong voice and you depict it well. On the last sentence of the first paragraph fix 'Its' to 'it's'.
ReplyDeleteGood Luck,
Martine ✿
Dear Bria,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your characters thoughts. Sometimes I can relate to Claire. I enjoyed how you could get a lot of information about on character in just two paragraphs of thoughts. For example how she's likes Jason and her friends. It really makes it more fun to read. Overall, it was great but maybe you should explain more about what she did with her friends.
Happy Blogging,
Annie Kramer